I'm writing a story,is this IM chat that's a part of it interesting? Would you read the entire story?
March 16th, 2010soccer_chick12: heyy mish!!!! wuts up!! omg how is it there??
spooked_out10: its awesome here i like it my house is huge!! did u get my email???
soccer_chick12: o that 1 unread was from u??!? i'll check it out, hold on...
spooked_out10: sure. :)
soccer_chick10: no way!!! u met a guy?!!!?!?? is he nice?!?!?!
spooked_out10: did u even read the email??? yes he's pretty nice.
soccer_chick12: and...
spooked_out10: and?
soccer_chick12: anything else???
spooked_out10: no nothing THAT way... nice try
soccer_chick12: whatever
soccer_chick12: :P
spooked_out10: same to you
soccer_chick12: :P :P :P :P
spooked_out10: give it up will you?
soccer_chick12: what up?
spooked_out10: trying to convince me to tell u something about kyle "that way"
soccer_chick12: well no i'm not
spooked_out10: yes u r
soccer_chick12: no
spooked_out10: yes
soccer_chick12: no no no !!
spooked_out10: yes yes yes yes !!!
soccer_chick12: ok, so tell me then!
spooked_out10: theres nothing about him that way!!!!
soccer_chick12: sure.
spooked_out10: reallyy!!!! oh! he's online! im talking to him. will you wait for about fifteen minutes???
soccer_chick12: sure! tell me everything!!!
spooked_out10: yah hold on. do something else for fifteen. k?? wait.
soccer_chick12: yep
spooked_out10: k hold on see u in fifteen.
New Instant Message With kyleLEN713(Kyle Lennons)
spooked_out10: hey
kyleLEN713: hey whats up
spooked_out10: nothing u?
kyleLEN713: just watching boo its me on tv
spooked_out10: oh wow so am i
kyleLEN713: kool
spooked_out10: cool u mean
kyleLEN713: do u have to correct me?
spooked_out10: yes.
kyleLEN713: :P
spooked_out10: :P
kyleLEN713: what else were u doing?
spooked_out10: iming my friend
kyleLEN713: back in LA
spooked_out10: yeah lauren campbell
kyleLEN713: k can i ask what ur talking about
spooked_out10: yes
kyleLEN713: k then what r u talking about? lol
spooked_out10: life here, how its like, etc
kyleLEN713: thats what u talk about?
spooked_out10: what'd u think we talk about?
kyleLEN713: girl stuff
spooked_out10: well we havent got there yet
kyleLEN713: tru
spooked_out10: true.
kyleLEN713: yeah whatever
spooked_out10: right
kyleLEN713: hey umm ur mom is like working with my mom, and they're like friends, my mom told me
spooked_out10: oh ok
kyleLEN713: yeah thought i'd bring up a topic. :)
spooked_out10: :)
kyleLEN713: soo umm i have 2 go
spooked_out10: wow this is ironic so do i
kyleLEN713: well bye
spooked_out10: bye
kyleLEN713 (Kyle Lennons) has signed out.
Click HERE to finish IM with soccer_chick12 (Lauren Campbell)
spooked_out10: hey i'm back
soccer_chick12: ooooh what'd u talk about???
spooked_out10: just random stuff.
soccer_chick12:like?
spooked_out10: well we talked about what we were doing now
soccer_chick12: then?
spooked_out10: he asked what else i was doing i said iming my friend
soccer_chick12: and?
spooked_out10: he said 'back in la?'
soccer_chick12: and u said yeah, my friend lauren?
spooked_out10: just 'yeah lauren campbell'
soccer_chick12: did he ask what we're talking about?
spooked_out10: yeah
soccer_chick12: boys r so nosy
spooked_out10: i just said life here, how its like,
soccer_chick12: and? u were gone pretty long, so im doing that 4 a long time
spooked_out10: he said thats wut you talk about?
soccer_chick12: and?
spooked_out10: I said wut'd u think we talk about?
soccer_chick12: and?
spooked_out10: he said girl stuff i said we hadnt gotten there yet
soccer_chick12:and?
spooked_out10: he said my mom is working with his mom and he said he said that to bring up a topic
soccer_chick12:so its not tru?
spooked_out10: no it is then we both had to go so thats it.
soccer_chick12: michelle carson, thats what u talk to a boy with????!?!?!?!?!?
spooked_out10: well i never imed a boy before ok gimme a break!
soccer_chick12: fine
spooked_out10: then u tell me what to talk about
soccer_chick12: plan something to do tomorrow or whatever.
soccer_chick12: or talk about what u did that day
spooked_out10: well that would be dumb we were together since afternoon
soccer_chick12: what'd u do?!!?!?!?????!?!!
spooked_out10: well we met then he said if i wanted to go to this street, and it was a prank, then we went to the park.
soccer_chick12: how'd u meet?
spooked_out10: he threw his dime and i fell off my bike because i got distracted
soccer_chick12: not very u-know-what
spooked_out10: not supposed to sweet this is crystal falls
soccer_chick12: whatever.
spooked_out10: what'd YOU do?
soccer_chick12: hang out with carmen and jess. talked and went to the summer dance
spooked_out10: was it fun?
soccer_chick12: ok i guess. there was nothing to do! the songs were horrible and food was nasty. and it was in broad daylight! dances r at night!
spooked_out10: look i gotta go, but bye! IM me tomorrow
soccer_chick12:sure i'll tell jess
"Click HERE to finish IM with soccer_chick12 (Lauren Campbell)" - messaging programs don't do this... just switching back would be fine; the readers already know kyle has signed off so there's only one person the character could be talking to.
"kyleLEN713: kool
spooked_out10: cool u mean
To be fair, it reads like a real IM.
kyleLEN713: do u have to correct me?
spooked_out10: yes."
Why would spooked be correcting kyle? They're both using improper English - unless you make spooked use proper spelling and grammar, this doesn't make sense.
any story which has any sort of "IM" takes place [especially this ridiculously long] I refuse to read.
I find anything like that in a story quite amateur and stupid.
sorry, but it's my opinion.
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